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Ashdenroth
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2022-07-21 23:51

Just started reading this book. The first person narration feels very personal and reflective. The language is simple and flows smoothly. I'd just like to offer a couple of suggestions : starting most sentences with 'I' makes it feel a bit monotonous, so the author might consider mixing things up a bit; secondly, the work could use more descriptive details to help the readers better visualise the surroundings. Hope it helps. Keep up the good work.

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