Review Detail of Jeri_ in Aithne: Daughter of the Flame

The first chapter was fire, but the second was mind blowing... It felt like I was reading a different story. lol The pov change, but that's not a problem if you know how to read novels. The second chapter felt a bit fake and too rushed, a few minor nobility errors can always be worked on though. A few grammatical errors, but you can always revise those. Your biggest mistake; was not allowing your readers to connect to your FL, you sent us into another story in the second chapter. I really had to read the second chapter twice to understand what was going on? FL, I think she's our heroine and comes back in chapter 6, which I didn't like as it could make readers lose their connection with the story. You kept adding unnecessary details that weren't really necessary, but still you portrayed the emotions well, I could feel every one of them. The story itself is unique, with interesting abilities and the plot stands out in my opinion as it's not a romance novel, I liked it. I'd advise you to cut some paragraphs but everything else was great. 🦋🦋🦋🦋