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Little_feelings
Little_feelingsLv22yr
2022-09-29 10:15

You started well, that i can say but one thing i noticed that you use a lot of tautologies. "What on earth brought you to my house? She said to him, not she asked him. There are things I don't have time to point about, but one more thing is your update schedule is really poor

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KingPablo
4.2
63 Chs

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KingPablo
KingPabloAuthor

It is completed. I only upload when I have a finished manuscript, hence the time span for the last update. I will work on the errors. Thanks for your opinion.

2yr
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Gebe
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Here comes my long awaited review😅, Soo I've read a lot of chapter, mostly cuz the names are most of my friends. Anyways, author has a writing quality which is okay, description is top-notch, but I think Rachel is easily manipulated.. plus this story has a lot of mystery.. nice one king 👌

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Little_North_Star
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What drew me in was the tittle and the synopsis..the decriptive flow of the book makes it easier to read, it has potential and it’s worth the read.good job[img=recommend]

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Marckaroni
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The story is definitly unique and intruiging. This is something very rare on webnovel and I appreciate it. The pace is a bit fast but it doesn‘t make it bad. The premise is promising and overall it is a good novel.

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Maxemillian
MaxemillianLv2

Definitely not my cup of tea but the story is good with an intresting plot. The writing quality is good, an overall good novel.

1yr
KexoHD
KexoHDLv1

Ok at first I can say something about the writing while the story yields sometimes its pretty good but the writing is bland without any type of style making the story feel melodramatic which can be fixed by a few tutorials. But its a pretty good read if you can just go for the story

1yr
Sweet_Vanilla553
Sweet_Vanilla553Lv13

The story is perfect. I just wanted to ask that if this is completed. It's because the last update has noted as three months ago... Anyways, As I was reading I discovered that this make me feels so happy. Actually, Ithis is my cup of tea. So it's good I got to read this. But I noticed some mistakes with punctual marks though. But this is a must read. I wish this could get more views.. Good luck author.. My honest opinion!

2yr
daniz_
daniz_Lv3

It's a nice story, I can say, but I kinda felt that the story is a little bit rushed. It's not a bad thing or anything, but I wanted to tell the author to take their time in writing.

2yr
XanaTrygg
XanaTryggLv3

First of all, I really liked the dialogues as they are smart and sharp through the story. The writing quality is also pretty good in general, with little to none spelling mistakes. What I did find, though, was that the dialogues perse were not well organized, so I got lost a little on that side. Still, the story is pretty good, and the characters are well developed as well (not a fan of the female lead, though, but that's just my personal taste). In general is a story worth you while, so give it a shot!

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Non_Lyke_Jos_Hua
Non_Lyke_Jos_HuaLv2

A romance novel that starts with tragedy that's something you don't see everyday. honestly speaking I'm not the type who goes for romance movies but the tragic beginning got me going nice work. this is one novel that can get you glued to your couch and phone.

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blissfullover99
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It's captivating and intriguing, the synopsis tells it all it's totally my style of romance story I want, keep going author 👍👍

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