This has quite a bit of potential. But it also has quite a few flaws. Your sentence structure could use some work. You have a tendency to write run on sentences and seem to have a great deal of difficulty describing things. I recommend that you practice writing poetry, it'll help you smooth out your writing, and make writing descriptions easier. I can't say much about the world background because I've never read Demon Slayer. Your character could use some work. What are his motives and desires, other than just survival and power? Does he have lines he won't cross, things that bother him? Without these things, you risk creating another generic murderhobo, and this site has too many of those as is. A little murder hobo here and there is fine, but all murder hobo all the time is not. I hope you find this review helpful.
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thank you for the review. I was thinking the same things. I have also noticed the flaws you pointed out, while I want improve them it'll take time a lot which I unfortunately don't have currently but the main motivation for the mc is to adventure. becoming powerful or knowledgeable comes second but yeah I am trying to improve them. as for describing things, that's a lot hard than I expected when I started writing 😅. but overall thanks
No problem, happy to help.
I recommend that you also figure out his alignment before you go to much further. Is he chaotic neutral, true neutral, lawful evil? I personally think he fits somewhere between true neutral and chaotic neutral.This should help you keep your characters behavior consistent.
I had already decided that before writing this I wanted a chaotic good character this time actually reading more detailed things so i changed my mind to true neutral. I wanted a mc who will prefer helping good people but will not always help them, if there are things he needed he would forcefully take them if needed kill good people.
True neutrals, from what I've seen at least, are usually obsessed with balance, and will usually side with the losing side regardless of if their good or evil to maintain that balance. At least that's usually the case with true neutral druids.