Item: Carl The Jumper (original)
Rating: 3.8
Author: MrNiab

MrNiabLv32yr

2022-10-31 03:04

first I want to say I am happy to see another jump chain story since they seem somewhat rare to find. Your story has a good start but there are two major problems I have seen so far. It would appear a lot of sentences are getting cut off on the side so you should look that over. Second, usually, the first 100 cp options for both perks and items are free for the origin you selected. Also, you might want to look up some supplements like body mod and warehouse.

Carl The Jumper (original)

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3.7

87 Chs

Liked by 3 people

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tony_stark_3000Author

thanks man for the help i for some reason all the space between the paragraph were removed i changed it so it is better. tell me if there are any more mistakes 😅. thanks.

2yr

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Pass_the_ChipsLv14

You acknowledge that this is a copy and gave homage to the original. I can respect that.

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Lonely_travelerLv12

interesting concept but the pacing is awful and the storying jumps around everywhere i dont even know whats going on anymore i feel like im on a bullet train like he driving home at the end of a chapter then next chapter outa nowhere he at another locations destroying a vampire next with a bunch of other characters with no buildup leading to this scene like there was barely a scene of him joining the gang

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ArtimerLv5

While I know that the story is a copy, it is really good and entertaining so it has my approval. Please keep updating this story.

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Aris82Lv15

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KIKOwoods_gamingLv4

this is a great story and i hope you continue to make it.

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NinjaBeanLv3

You shold create a update status page that shows all his abilities and perks, his level and more. I like your story. [img=recommend][img=recommend]

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MissRiasLv4

The story is great, it's a shame that the original author stopped writing chapters.

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MissRiasLv4

The story is great, too bad it's not complete I think it has something like that of 100 chapters or more, but it's paused or canceled. But still take 5 The story is great, too bad it's not complete I think it has something like that of 100 chapters or more, but it's paused or canceled. But it still takes 5 stars

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