Immortal_OrcaLv12yr

2022-07-18 18:23

So far it's a pretty good read there's alot of cool ideas you've incorporated into the novel but I feel like some were added just as an afterthought which while not a bad thing, makes them seem underutilized. In terms of writing quality the beginning of the novel was pretty shaky honestly, however there is a stark contrast between chapter 1 and chapter 10 as the quality made a huge jump so you're improving very quickly. As for the characters themselves, it's a bit early to tell but I feel like I can at least get the general feeling of how you want to portray them which is a good start. I don't really know what more to write but in conclusion, although the novel had a shaky start, I think you're very quickly improving your writing and it really shows, keep it up!

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Silentfairy

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