Review Detail of RottenEgg in Devour Heaven

I really enjoyed reading your story. I appreciate how you built up the background and set the scene for the action. The way the protagonist brutally attacked someone who was peacefully sleeping was shocking, but I found it engaging. I did notice that you used the word "thunder" quite frequently in this chapter, but it added to the atmosphere of the situation. I liked how the protagonist consistently checked their interface to track their progress. Overall, I thought the emotions, scene, and actions were well-developed and I felt engaged while reading. The pace of the story was entertaining and I am intrigued to continue reading.