Review Detail of Dyjhi_Tokishira in 2. Dropped

There are some grammar issues but once you start ignoring them and envision the story, it pulls you in. The pacing is smooth and I just found myself at the end of the chapter. World building, not so much but not necessary at the same time. Characters can already be seen as defined uniquely in just one chapter. I don't know much about the story yet with just one chapter and a short prologue but yeah, just those two made me interested. Great start, would love to see more chapters in the near future.