Review Detail of MansonFD7 in My throne

A promise always be a promise (As I promised to make a 10 chapter review swap). But it turns out, the promise I wanted to make was my first and last mistake. I've stopped at the 2nd chapter on how much the mistakes the 1st two chapters are. Consists of: 1. Grammatical error 2. Useless info-dumping 3. Not much of punctuations 4. Story felt detached/rushed 5. And the chapters are too long (Maybe it's exceeding 2k words) If you make a chapter that contained these mistakes, then how can the reader comfortably read your story? Only if you had to fix these issues, I'll gladly changing my mind and reading your entire book. And maybe, my only suggestion is to using ProWritingAid. Because this grammar checker apps are specifically designed for a creative writing, like for the most novel authors.