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This novel is definitely interesting, I would love to see where it goes from here. This novel does have some glaring flaws though. The pace is very fast, it feels like the author has good ideas on what to do but in many places he forgot to write them, which makes the reader feel like they missed something and have to reread a bit to try to understand. The characters aren’t very well developed after a point. The Mc jumps from one thing to another and decides very randomly on what needs to be done. The Mc is said to be incredibly smart, but it goes back and forth between him being obsessive with something that would minority benefit him and him being intelligent and understanding. For example the whole art bit; Seth gets incredibly obsessed with it though it does help him in a few ways, there are many things that he could’ve done better instead. He takes no care for his physical body despite knowing that his brain is simply too amazing for his body and for him to do anything better he has to get his body to be more up to par. Then there is the months that Seth spent on obsessively working on becoming a false chief of a fake town he made of sculptures. He has next to no real reason to do that and nearly dies to do it. meanwhile he gets better at next to nothing for that entire time. And when he does get a chance to practically have his choice of any occupation as a class, instead of choosing something that would be helpful to him in both the short and long run, he chose to be a noble which even till the end barely had any real effect or helped him. The characters are not well fleshed out and aren’t very understandable in many to most situations. The world building is very interesting and I would want to see where it goes. But as mentioned earlier, it feels like the author has some good ideas but he doesn’t always write down what is going on or explain why a character would do something. The writing quality isn’t great either. There are many typos and it definitely feels like the further you read the less this novel has been proofread to clear up the writing. It feels like the author was just trying to get as much done as possible in a time limit without worrying about what was being written. All in all, it’s an interesting story. Despite my several misgivings about it I would still like to see more about it and read where the author takes this.
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Thank you very much. Truthfully some of the things you said are correct especially about not fleshing out certain things to make them consistent and plausible. Though, I didn't feel it was fast-paced pace but now that I checked it was at some places, the reason was I wanted to finish with the continent and jum to the normal ones where most of the players are. However, I will devise a better pace in future chapters. I would like to clarify certain things too. 1. Seth Enoch body is hard to improve like other people because of that he focuses on art and others as that is the only thing that will aid him in the game. However, if you read far enough he was on his way to imbue a bloodline that he thinks will suit him and improve his physique. Well, I won't spoil whether he succeeds or not. 2. Another thing was, due to him becoming a fake chief and others he managed to gain Exertion Points attribute which allowed him to have a normal physique as long as he had Exertion Points. But without them, he was a thorough cripple. 3. During the class options, if you remember he was in a delusional state after escaping Red Valley and other dangers he was facing atop on that he was being forced to choose a class very fast in that situation. At that moment combat class would be a good choice but his body would not accept any kind of that class, the best was noble which he chose not because of combat but to oppose his real life status of commoner. 4. A spoiler, a mage-like class is good for him but he can't learn Spell the usual way like using a skill book and others. Only through Arcane which was an intense study of spells and conjuring them but that will take time which he doesn't have. 5. What his body can take was strange blessings the likes he was able to gain from Dragons due to Noble Class Quest and from Red Valley which came from Ancient Red Dragon. Anyway, thank you for the feedback it really helped a lot.