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2023-12-26 01:09

Thought this was a kingdom building novel yet was surprised to see the MC completely bend over and becoming a puppet leader. This left a bad taste in my mouth. Where's the kingdom building? Where's the Explore, Expand, Exploit, Exterminate? There's a conquer tag, probably misleading since it's the MC who's getting conquered. There's no kingdom building to be had when you're a vassal, author.

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MaxLostchild
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That is why I am doing a rewrite. To fix these issues.

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AngelKnightZed
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I have to drop a review here since I replied in a different review, which might not be read unless readers open that other review's threads. Take note of the "anti-hero" tag. As I replied in another review, I am unsure if anti-hero meant to intentionally act against common "hero" tropes, or a type of villain that does what he does to survive, even at the cost of being hated. i mention this because of other reviews complaining about the MC, "being made into a puppet", "uncaring of family", being cold-hearted, stupid or foolish. My retrospect of this is that I noticed that the side-characters and world background is written to be more cunning/intelligent/motivated, much more than the supposed MC -- now why are the other characters written in such a way, that clearly shows the author has the ability to also make the MC act "more intelligent/less dumb"... as if it was done one purpose, as if the MC is being forced to a lower importance of the story than the rest of the world... It seemed suspicious to me at least, in fact it kind of weaves an "anti-plot-armor" vibe; combine this with the "slice-of-life" tag, that hints to readers that this will be a SLOW-going storybuilding, makes me anticipate what this author is trying to cook up -- this is NOT a story where the reader is spoon-fed convenient plot devices, where everything always goes in MC's favor -- I admit that it is obvious that the MC is foolishly flaunting his advantages (inventions and tech, that gets stolen or manipulated from him), but it is delivered in such an obvious way, suspiciously obvious... TL:DR - the author writes the background world and characters, in a very rich and intelligent way, showing that the author is capable of making really good story-development. Then why is the MC so "dumb"? Is it on purpose? Food for thought.

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