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fourzer0seven
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2023-02-21 13:26

hey author, are you not going to release more chapters ?

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This review was part of a feedback swap. So... I really hate NTR. I wouldn't have read this if it wasn't for the feedback swap. That said, I'm not reducing my score because it's a genre I don't like. If you enjoy NTR, you'll probably enjoy that aspect of this story. The initial character designs and world are interesting. I appreciate the sense of history that the fantasy world seems to carry, and the pacing across the first few chapters available now feels right. The writing quality is pretty poor, unfortunately. The author simultaneously uses a lot of English idioms and mechanical structures like a native speaker of US English, but then there are some very strange constructions that sound like the typical English-as-a-Second-Language writers on this site. The contrast between these is actually more jarring than if the writing was consistently disjointed. Here's a particularly bad example from "Chapter 2: Prologue": "I am not a Shut-In NEET Otaku that you must have thought about me. I am just closed off from the society of my own free will." The worst aspect of the writing is the way scenes blend first-person and third-person narration. They tend to open and end with third-person descriptions of the viewpoint character, but everything between is made up of first-person narration. It made immersing myself in the story completely impossible. Maybe in a format where italics could clearly delineate different sections of the text this could work to some degree, but not here. The combination of all these elements, even though the story itself (aside from the content I don't like) had a promising start, made this webnovel unreadable to me.

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