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Dragon8992
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2022-08-26 17:18

Love your book. Kindly please increase the chapter release. Please use grammaly for spelling and grammar mistakes. Looking forward to future chapters hopefully will get writing quality like your other novel and some lemon scenes.

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Shooting_Star
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You may not believe it, but I always check on Grammarly before posting a chapter and I have Grammarly premium. maybe because it's not Grammarly business. (trying to make excuses. LOL) Well, I'm sorry for the mistake. Oh, you read my main novel? What chapter are you in now? About the chapter release, I will try my best to increase it. Writing two novels side by side is a lot harder than I thought. I underestimated it. What?! Is the quality of the writing different? Maybe because my vocabulary is limited or I'm not used to writing fantasy. (Another reason. LOL) For the lemon scene, you'll get a lot after returning to Nightshire city. Lastly, thank you for reading my novel.

Anarook_tylde
Anarook_tyldeLv13

why does it feel soooo much like a chinese novel?

Shooting_Star: You may not believe it, but I always check on Grammarly before posting a chapter and I have Grammarly premium. maybe because it's not Grammarly business. (trying to make excuses. LOL) Well, I'm sorry for the mistake. Oh, you read my main novel? What chapter are you in now? About the chapter release, I will try my best to increase it. Writing two novels side by side is a lot harder than I thought. I underestimated it. What?! Is the quality of the writing different? Maybe because my vocabulary is limited or I'm not used to writing fantasy. (Another reason. LOL) For the lemon scene, you'll get a lot after returning to Nightshire city. Lastly, thank you for reading my novel.
Shooting_Star
Shooting_StarAuthor

maybe because I read too many cultivation novels. lol actually, I dont know how the system works in the game, so I trick it. lets just say its mixed between magic and cultivation.

Anarook_tylde:why does it feel soooo much like a chinese novel?
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