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2022-07-08 09:29

Overall it’s an ok novel to pass the time, my only issue with it is that it doesn’t have any stakes. Everything just somehow works out for the main character. Plot points just happen without any explanation. You show us the result but not any of the, I guess inner monologue. It doesn’t really go into detail on things. Like the timeskip, you show us that Ino and Sakura try to better them selves. But you do nothing about Sasukes perspective especially since Uchiha’s are more emotional than any other clan. Same for how Naruto, somehow got over Sakura. The juicy parts are just skipped over for plot progression. It reads less like a Naruto Fanfiction and more like a Naruto Cast in a AU world without the nitty gritty bits that made the universe so good. (Delete Boruto, and war arc).

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First of all, I apologize for being a filthy casual. I know how the system works and just reading your work and not contributing to it's success is just selfish. Have my stones from now on. Anyway, this is a review in the form of a rant so I'll give it to you straight. Writing is good, characters isn't one dimensional but the problem I have is your rep and the tone of the story. You know what type of people use this app, so you know their preferences. Even a minor slight against your MC will get you hounded and they'll say things like 'NTR!' even though the MC clearly has no interest in the Heroine. But, that's just how it is. No matter how much you say it isn't a self-insert, for you, it's not, but for the readers, it is. I suggest that you just find a balance where you write what you want and the readers want so everyone is happy. You have a reputation to uphold too, why tf are you limiting yourself and saying bs like 3 members in the harem when you did like a million in your successful fanfic. Live up to your rep my guy, if the readers want all the girls in the harem, then put them all in, you got the skills for it, right? I'm not really interested in harems but your skills in bringing characters to life is so phenomenal that it got me invested in your story. Just change the tone or something, make it a 'regret' type where the heroine finally realizes the MC's worth, and call it a day. Ps. I was surprised by the way Naruto gave up on Sakura so quickly to be honest, even tho he chased after her the whole series. P.P.S. Don't stop when you already got the ball rolling. P.P.P.S. Sorry for the one star, it attracts more attention than five stars anyway. Five stars all the way.

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