Review Detail of Helia_King in MHA Quirk: Calling Critters

While I like it the grammar needs work and I have some problems with a specific chapter. 1. You need to not be so focused on one scene that you forget the world around them exists cause that part in the alleyway doesn’t make sense after a while. How can someone cause so much commotion in broad daylight and not have at least one hero check on what’s going on. There were guns and grenades being used so it doesn’t make sense. And if their main focus was getting izuku out of there so he didn’t get kidnapped then why was dogday kicking a guy in the nuts for hours. But if that was supposed to be minutes then fine but they could’ve taken that chance to run. If you decide to write a scene like this in the future you shouldn’t be so focused on it that you forget the world around them exists and that there are heroes almost everywhere especially since this was done in broad daylight.