Will give it 5 stars but...it needs a lot of work, it doesn't give me the feeling that I'm reading a novel. I'm still in the process of reading it and the chapters are very short but there is something about this writing that I can't put my finger on that just makes it seem...incomplete. Maybe someone with better critiquing abilities will be able to spot it but this novel just doesn't feel like a novel, it's somewhere between that and a journal. I plan on continuing to read it for now but these are my thoughts. I recommend readers check it out for themselves. Good luck, author, I don't like leaving bad reviews since I think everyone should give a novel a try before they bash it and especially for new novels, leaving a poor review (star wise), can be detrimental
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From what I've read its in narrator's pov that's why it feels like a journal. The problem is in sentence structure like "if both of them attacked at the same time it would have created trouble for themselves, but they did not attack at the same time so it did not create trouble for themselves" Also uses names a lot instead of he/she.
