Item: Unravel The World
Rating: 4
Author: CathAnnSweetflowr

CathAnnSweetflowrLv12yr

2022-08-19 10:28

Hi Author! I like this book so far. The first chapter took me by surprise with how negative the MC is, but I get where they're coming and why they think that way. It's refreshing to find a character like this compared to the "typical strong-willed, can't be dragged down and is always tough no matter what MC". I know this is a sci-fi story but the synopsis has me feeling rather lost, it's not bad but it could be better. I noticed that there are some instances where the reader is told what is going on rather than showing. It's just a personal preference but I'd rather find out what is going on as it is happening rather than being told what happened, unless it's background info meant to be sprinkled throughout the story. As for the writing quality, the style is good. Nothing too difficult to understand and easy to catch on to. However, please use the free version of Grammarly to double-check for some errors you may have missed. It's your first book, not bad at all. The worldbuilding is okay as described but like the synopsis, it could be better. Overall, the story is good so far. Nothing too flimsy that could crumble at any moment and it has a direction, I'm keeping my fingers crossed for a character development arc because I adore those. Especially when the character would learn from it and it makes me want to cheer for them! Great job, Author. <3

Unravel The World

Chuzi

Not enough ratings

27 Chs

Liked by 1 people

No replies. Be the first!

Other Reviews

Prince_nonchalantLv3

The book has an interesting take. I must say that it grabbed my attention in the very first chapter. The MC is certainly unique and not one that most people try to write these days. I like his dark outlook on life. Synopsis: Honestly, this could have been done better. While reading it, I wasn't sure what it was trying to convey. I felt a little confused and so I dived into the story without knowing what to expect. Writing Quality: This is very good. In terms of punctuations, vocabulary, etc, it is done very well. I saw a few instances where capitalizations were missing but those might have just slipped past the author. I'd recommend using Grammarly to catch those hidden errors. Story Development: Again, I like the MC. The story seems interesting and unique. It feels like a breath of fresh air when compared to most of the "copy and paste" stories I've seen. I can get behind the author with this one in regards to pacing and quality. World Background/Building: Not bad. Few more words could be used to describe the setting of the world but that's fine. This book is mixed with normal and abnormal things which I like. Overall: The story seems pretty solid so far. I like the direction and build-up around the character and his attitude. I am the type of person who loves character development though, so while I like the "Nigerian Prince" so far, a change in his attitude, later on, would do him justice. Good job and keep up the good work author!

2yr

ChuziAuthor

"Every writer is already a liar" i read that somewhere, please five star the book, it doesn't cost a kobo. The five stars are a promise to do my best, so if you like the book. motivate me! [img=update]

2yr

Kamelzy1Lv2

The story is unique, of course in a good way. The MC also has an interesting character, keep writing and keep it up author![img=recommend][img=recommend]

2yr

UrcrayontasticLv10

I love what I've read so far! The MC is different than what you would expect, but that's a good thing! Keep writing and keep up the great work! A wonderful story so far.

2yr

TalentlessCarin_Lv3

It is my first time to read a sci-fi genre novel in this app and i already liking it, good job dear author. Keep up the good work you're doing great!

2yr

I Have A City In An Alternate World

Tang Zhen transmigrated to an apocalyptic world, where humans struggled to survive in various buildings that they built because the ground was covered in lethal dangers that were invisible to the naked eye. Tang Zhen transmigrated along with his mutated cell phone that was packed with miraculous applications. There were all kinds of cities – some could fly in the sky, some could submerge into the ocean while some could become invisible – and shocking secrets were hidden within them. The power of Tang Zhen’s city was… He established a city and quickly leveled up his army with speeding tools. Then, he dominated this alternate world by seizing other cities. He sat at the very top. Beneath his feet was a vast floating city guarded by dragons and surrounded by angels. Countless cannons were also set up at various corners of the city. A million miles ahead, in the depths of the ocean, there was another city as large as a continent awaiting his conquest.

Han Mubai · Sci-fi

3.8

4833 Chs

Battle Frenzy

Amidst a disaster, an orphan contracts a sickness. In his waking hours, he is tormented by his ailment, but when he slumbers, there is infinite darkness. One day, when he was five years old, a strange Fate Trickster appeared in his dreams. Ten years later, he dreams of becoming a lord. To do so, he takes a chance to trade his fate! That day, Wang Zhong once again stood at the gates of the Tianjing Heroic Soul Academy. He was about to start a brand new life.

Skull Elf · Sci-fi

4.5

1212 Chs

Getting a Technology System in Modern Day

For others it takes dying and reincarnating for them to get a system but what happens when you get one without dying? Aron Michael is an average student set to graduate within a week, but he was expelled for a random reason. Due to that, he had heavy student debt and no diploma to help him earn the money to pay it back. But one day he got a system that called itself the [Advanced Tech System]. follow the story to watch him develop from your average Joe to him being the owner of the largest company in the world. Discord server is open: https://discord.gg/KptypY8dGh ********************************************DISCLAIMER************************************************ This book is a work of fiction. Names, characters, businesses, places, events, and incidents are either the product of the author's imagination or used in a fictitious manner. Any resemblance to actual persons, living or dead, or actual companies is purely coincidental. The portrayal of names, characters, positions, and companies in this book is entirely fictional and not intended to represent real-life counterparts. All content in this book that may share names, characteristics, positions, or companies with real-life entities is purely coincidental and does not indicate any conflicting part to their real-life counterparts. The author and publisher do not have any intention to defame, discredit, or infringe upon the rights of any individual, company, or entity mentioned in this book. This book is meant for entertainment purposes only and should not be construed as factual or a representation of real-life events or people.

Agent_047 · Sci-fi

4.2

879 Chs

Super Detective in the Fictional World

Luke has transmigrated to the United States, but eventually realizes that this United States is different from the United States of his previous life. Here, the superpowers and characters from the movies in his previous life actually exist. How will Luke fare in a world where such terrifying superpowers exist? Fortunately, he has a cheat – the Super Detective System. Join Luke on his new journey toward becoming a detective.

Icy Plain's Three Elegance · Sci-fi

4.4

2233 Chs

Live Streaming: Great Adventure in the Wilderness

In the swamp, mosquitoes danced, and a five-meter long bay crocodile was firmly bound at the snout, its vertical pupils gleaming with ferocity. At that moment, a young man cover in mud was straddling it, and he was very modest in the face of audience's praise. "I'm Bi Fang, a professional explorer. I have trekked atop the roof of the world and traversed through the Valley of Death, and I've even challenged the mysterious Amazon. Even the National Geographic has named me the world's premier survival expert, the king of the wild at the top of the food chain, but trust me, that's all an overstatement..." Under the crimson clouds, Bi Fang silently tightened the rope in his hand and, seeing that the bay crocodile beneath him had finally stopped struggling, he pulled out the Hunting Knife and killed it with a single strike to the underside of its jaw. "Today is the second day of survival. I thought I would have to endure another hungry night, but now it seems, dinner has taken care of itself."

Shell Ant · Sci-fi

3.9

948 Chs

Becoming Invincible in the Game-Invaded World

The century-old online game "New World" that swept the entire Blue Star announced its shutdown! At once, the entire network went crazy. People frantically sold equipment and gold coins. Everyone had only one plan—to recover their losses! Some extreme people were so angry that they even deleted their accounts! Lin Chen, who had been reborn, knew that everything would change in half a month. When "New World" invaded reality, the entire Blue Star would face a huge change! Zombies, the undead... and all kinds of monsters from the game would ravage the world! And those who retained their game characters could inherit the abilities of the game according to their ratings! Looking at the various game props that had plummeted in price, Lin Chen was happy. Permanent fashion? Buy it! Rare pet eggs? Buy it! Skill books? Buy it! Full-level divine equipment? Even if he had to take out a loan, he would buy it!

Stepping on the Azure Sky · Sci-fi

3.3

670 Chs

Oh My God! Earthlings are Insane!

Fifty years ago, Dragon City transmigrated to the Other World. Alone in the world, they lifted the banner of Earth’s civilization and fought against the terrifying forces of the Other World. And in the end, Dragon City was destroyed. Then, Meng Chao was reborn after Dragon City was destroyed, and he returned to the time fifty years after Dragon City transmigrated to the Other World. But he was not alone, he returned with a system named Kindling, who told him that he can become stronger if he contributed to society. So Meng Chao swore that he would become stronger. In the beginning, he only wanted to make small contributions to the society by teaching them technology, martial arts, and skills from the future, and in the end, everything snowballed from there, and he found that… Earthlings were really insane.

The Enlightened Master Crouching Cow · Sci-fi

4.2

1963 Chs

Supremacy Games

Felix Maxwell was destined to be a loser, born on one of the weakest races and on the least favorable of situations, he was forced to face adversity head-on as he traveled across the vast universe where dangers laid in every corner, one day traveling in hopes of riches he stumbled upon a ruin where a supreme being laid imprisoned, in a stroke of bad luck the being laid its eyes on him and tried to take over his body, forcing itself upon him. But fate hadn't given up on him! He woke up in his younger body, 20 years in the past with the fallen being trapped in his soul. In his past life he had been a loser, giving up on things mid-way and never striving for greatness, he was a side character who made the strong shine even brighter, but not on this life. He swore to himself he would strive for glory, he would take advantage of his knowledge and emerge as a supreme being! ...... Novel Discord: https://discord.gg/FTfXXYHnFT This is my Patreon, everyone is welcomed to drop by! https://www.patreon.com/MidGard_Author

MidGard · Sci-fi

4.7

1961 Chs