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Kw0zLv142yr
2022-09-01 11:13

I appreciate your efforts to write a good novel, but this is just not good… 1. You constantly mistake pronouns. 2. The POV changes make it extremely difficult to even tell who the main character is. 3. Three chapters in, and the main character is nowhere to be seen, unless the main character is the girl the POV is constantly following. 4. It’s just not very smart to use a side character’s POV rather than the main character’s, otherwise it makes me think that said side character is the MC.

The Demon of Lust: If you want to live, keep me entertained

InstaMoist
4.5
65 Chs

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InstaMoist
InstaMoistAuthor

This is the first story that I have published on a Webnovel, and I sincerely hope that you enjoy reading it. The world I created is expansive, and numerous mysteries keep cropping up so you don't get bored. However, the beginning of the chapter may leave you feeling a little bewildered due to the fact that the point of view keeps shifting. You will be following the main character, who has the heart of a demon, so there will be many violent and brutal scenes throughout the story. However, I guarantee that you will enjoy it as the story progresses. There is an additional adult scene... if you know what I mean. Don't be shy about sharing your thoughts in the comment section.

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qurat_ul_ain4
qurat_ul_ain4Lv1

Although, the start was bit confusing but as I read further, things got clearer on its own.. Author did the great job in choosing words in narration. Wonderful vocabulary! Great work.. Keep writing the minor issues will resolve with the practice... Nevertheless, I enjoyed reading the story.. Rooting for you!

2yr
Biva
BivaLv3

Wonderful story. Despite the confusion in the beginning the story developed and world building is great. After few chapters I understood the perception. I like the character of Alice the most because of her intelligence and cuteness. Every character has unique personality. Great work author!! With the background of war, being the envoy and role of MC is more to see. I recommend everyone should absolutely read it.

2yr
StumblingtoSuccess
StumblingtoSuccessLv11

loved it. It has a nice premise. It was confusing at first. I mean really confusing. But later the story did a hard carry. I hope you don't stop. I want to see more from you, My friend.

2yr
Juliet_Omuadona
Juliet_OmuadonaLv4

I have only read a few chapters, but I can tell that the story would be action-packed. Although I was a bit confused in the first two chapters, it got better after that. The story keeps me guessing.

2yr
_Rockbison_
_Rockbison_Lv3

Nice plot l must say..... Its just getting me read this story more... So plzzz author do upload more so that l can read more 🤭🤭.... Keep going l really really like the sotry...

2yr
POW
POWLv1

The shifting POVs are a bit annoying, but it gets good if you dedicate your focus and try to absorb everything. The overall plot is easy to follow, though, and so far, the worldbuilding and the charas feel fine, excited for new chaps!

2yr
bunnyrabbit
bunnyrabbitLv2

I would say that this is a pretty good story knowing that this is the author's first story. And I'll give that to [her?]. The world is pretty expansive, it looks like a lot of thought was invested into the world building. Though I'd say it honestly, I was kind of confused by the constant shift in perspective but I'm not really bothered by it since the author already mentioned it in the comment section. There were some capitalization mistakes and punctuation misplacements but not too distracting. Overall, I gave it 4.8. Keep it up, author!!! And keep improving!

2yr
popyStyko
popyStykoLv1

love it! [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

2yr
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