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Ultira_Mado
Ultira_MadoLv12yr
2022-08-02 19:52

Writing quality 5/10, I kinda understand since you're still an immature writer, so I'll give this a pass. Update stability 3/10, Consistent but slow... 1 chapter a day isn't enough, personally. Story development 5/10, kinda rushed but still in an ok range. Character design 10/10, described perfectly perhaps a little too much showing instead of telling, but it doesn't bothers me. World building is amazingly done 100/10, creative.. that's all I'm gonna add.

The Quantum Manipulator

OnizukaShinu
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OnizukaShinu
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Thank you for the review I want to improve my writing quality as wel

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Empzze
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First off, great work author, interesting storyline with well-written chapters, I just started reading and at first, I thought since it wasn't a genre I was familiar with, it was going to be difficult to read but it wasn't. The synopsis is great too, short but captivating, it was able to make me wonder about who Killigan Everheart is. In all, this story definitely has great potential. keep up the good work.

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NixOrtikal
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Grammar mistakes aside, the writer does his best to gain the reader's attention with an interesting opening. Also shows the ability to carry this story with great world building, continue to write and keep up the good work.

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OnizukaShinu
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Shameless author review! Hey! I.. got nothing to say personally. Just read it and enjoy this random thing a I’ve made up. I do hope to inquire thy assistance to criticize my work to help me improve in writing! Thanks!

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Rayne_Rue
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Great chapters, Love the plot. The character design was designed well and I loved the characters, especially the Ml. Updating stability is excellent as well, I really did love to recommend this book and the author should work on some editing but apart from that I really loved reading the first 6 chapters, great work author....

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