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2022-10-21 19:43

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First of all, the potential of the story is not that great. This kind of plot has already been used a lot of times, but sometimes an overused plot can still be good if added with enough spice to make the story interesting, or if the spices are different, the story might be somewhat or entirely unique to its predecessors. Second, the progression of the story is too rushed, or I might say that the author is lazy enough to make a lore or a plot for the novel. Then there's the world background, and I might say that the world background of this novel is below average. Why? Because the story is too rushed, there are a lot of things in the story that aren't explained thoroughly enough for the readers to understand, and there's a sudden drop of new information with no proper background or history for the thing to stand on its own and justify the author's decision to create it in the first place. Third, the writing quality itself is somewhat average or slightly above average because the author didn't put enough love and effort into writing this novel, and loving your work is an important characteristic of a good novel. If you just write a novel as a product, the reader must also feel that. Lastly, the updating stability is good, but quality must come before quantity. In conclusion, the only downsides to this novel are the too fast story progression, the lack of effort put into putting lore in the story, and the fact that the story is not unique enough to satisfy veteran readers who have already read a ton of novels.

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