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2022-07-23 20:40

The spelling errors are quite bothering to fully get into the story (in the early chapters) as a reader for me. But the plot is kinda interesting. And morover it's also rooted with realism and has a very grounded approach. When characters are having a conversation, it really feels like two people are actually talking. My only gripe is the slow pace and very long stretched out chapters. I am a difficult reader, so it may be just for me🤷‍♂️ but since the novel had already crossed a considerable amount of chapters, I believe has rectified all the issues I mentioned. Good luck with your Edward's self-journey

A Second Chance of Having Youth

0Mashroom
4.4
180 Chs

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0Mashroom
0MashroomAuthor

Thank you for your structured critique. I'll keep that in mind for further chapters. I will be making in the future. Hopefully, you may continue reading this. ;)

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tortle
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use grammarly extension author...it helps alot

0Mashroom:Thank you for your structured critique. I'll keep that in mind for further chapters. I will be making in the future. Hopefully, you may continue reading this. ;)
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The plot is lit! It was an interesting start! The grammar was on point with slight edits that had to be made for perfection! Well, the pacing of the story is fine too, good job! I like the story and hope it gets more support. Good luck with your writing journey, [img=recommend] I can't wait for you to become mature and a veteran author someday [img=faceslap] Keep growing and master your writing style hehe 👍

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