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SurelyNotEli
SurelyNotEliLv42yr
2022-06-25 15:12

The chapters are really short, like really REALLY short. On top of having no content or story within them, (they’re too short to even tell a real story) half of the chapters are sometimes just XP and system stuff. I get it’s a system but seriously? Half the chapter being just the HUD/UI giving xp and upgrades? Where’s the actual… you know… story? There’s tons of grammatical errors as well, making it awkward to read. The dialogue is insanely bad and awkward too. The Bruce Banner chapter makes this very evident, I could not believe the dialogue when I read it, it sounds AI generated. This just isn’t good. I saw the views and 130+ powerstones thinking this was gonna be a good fanfic but I was extremely let down. It makes me wonder if this guy is somehow buying powerstones from people or paying them off. I just can’t see how this could be enjoyable in the slightest. To sum it up: Short chapters with no plot 👎🏿 Half the chapter is sometimes just XP menus 👎🏿 Terrible grammar 👎🏿 Awkward dialogue 👎🏿 Overall unenjoyable to read 👎🏿👎🏿👎🏿

Marvel: A New Parker

Joe_TA
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12 Chs

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SurelyNotEli
SurelyNotEliLv4

He flirted with his aunt too... yeah that’s as far as I’m going 😭😭😭

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Joe_TA
Joe_TAAuthor

Thax for the review, however I'm writing this novel for fun otherwise is would tell people to read chapters on my patreon and you could see that I progress the story with votes from the readers so I'm not actually being serious also my English isn't my first language so don't expect a scholar writing... does authors actually pay people for power stones??

2yr
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Shadow1609
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Joao_Pedro_5293
Joao_Pedro_5293Lv13

Não faças harem!!!! pls! [img=faceslap] A outra história é boa e não contem harem, acho que numa história deste tipo não fica muito bem... Mas claro... no final é sempre escolha do autor.

2yr
ANANTA
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To The Author, Kindly continue the novel Make the MC an Anti-Hero with Full Solid Black Assassin Suit with best material, A Master of All Things in everthing beyond any level we can imagine - Magic( Rune, Wizardry, Sorcery, etc.,) Martial Art( Chi, Cultivator and varies combat Arts) Science(Inventor, Scientist, Engineer,Medicine and Doctor etc.,) and many more things to Mastery. Make him the best in intellect(Science) and Combat Arts In level beyond the level even Bruce Wayne(BATMAN) can't imagine. Make Mutants into Meta-Humans. Also, Keep the Characters from Both Western and Eastern Heroes from Comics and already known characters. Hope to see these soon! Thanks! Reader. 2. To the author, since your fanfic is mostly like the Mix of MCU and EARTH 616 - Make to MC to go back in the past in The Library Of Calegastro learn all the Magic there copy all those books distribute to Kamar Taj and copy for himself as well make him go to Mimir and Yggdrasil to gain more about Runes and Knowledge of Various ARTS(Magic, Combat, Tech-Magic or Etc., just make it up also make him do the works to influence people on Earth to save nature through Tech-Magic to save Earth Environment To Make the Qi, Ki, Chi , Mana Richer on Earth than any other place in the whole Multiverse) of the whole Universe or Multiverse. Make him a Grand-Master to teach all people Combat Arts and Magic Arts - ( Manupulation and uses of Chi, Ki , Qi and Mana into various Arts ) especially on Earth as his base operation. Thanks! - Reader.

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