Review Detail of Notion_Theory in The War ending

Your book was well written There weren't any gramatical and punctuale problems I would advise you to not write the location like e.g like you did with "the home" or "the room" Instead of doing that you could describe the location and build atmosphere, give some imagery of how the location looks. The story is pretty intriguing and the twins are interesting and pretty likable And it was pretty good all in all Just build more atmosphere for situations and give more expressive dialogue for the characters to make them more unique