Review Detail of oufrontis_panayis in For the Empire

I liked this story so far.It had a very interesting take on stormtroopers as servants of the Empire as well as its citizens. Overall, it was well paced amd had interesting dialogue and action. Info have 2 criticisms, and I mean them in the kindest way. 1st. I felt the author went a little too far in trying humanize the troopers. In showing that they cared about helping citizens he made them too accommodating. I feel the same relationships could have been have been established even if the troopers were more rough in their language and the assistance that they offered.The troopers came off a little like a loving mother when maybe they should have been more like an older brother, loving and helpful but also tougher and mocking. An older brother that wants his little sibling to succeed but won't hold your hand while assisting and is capable of giving a good hard kick to the butt so long at sends the younger sibling sprawling in the right direction. There was a little sliver of that in the second chapter but not enough. I think ot would have added more depth to the characters. 2nd. I didn't feel it was necessary for any famous star wars characters to appear in this story at all. If the meeting was to occur at all it should have been by chance, of the same characters being in the same place at the same time. Other than that, I enjoyed this story immensely and am curious to see where it will lead