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2022-07-10 15:50

Ok, i dont mean to be (that guy) but spending 5 of your 16 chapters without even mentioning or showing the MC is something I have never seen before. And I quickly realised why, because i almost dropped the novel. I dont know why you did that tbh I read EVERYTHING and nothing that took place for 5 whole chapters was worth while. (Im not trying to hate, just hear me Out) Im gonna keep it a buck with you author, if this was ANY other novel I would have dropped after the second chapter where the MC was NON EXISTENT, and left a 2 star review. Im saying this because that isnt a good portrayal of your story. It could be amazing but we would never know because we got so fed up lol It was like you were TRYING to draw me away from the novel lol (Other than that, the story is cool, i just felt i HAD to say something about that)

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