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2022-11-14 08:06

This started off good but too many pov switches literally mc barely appears and the author drags side character arcs for no reason

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Have to disagree, I haven't dragged them at all.

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VOID_Author

I write POVs with relevance, the things the aid characters are doing are what's going to make the biggest impact. I'd have you seeing that than watching Ezra swing his sword all day. Most likely, you're not used to reading a story in this format-can't do anything about that.

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VOID_Author

Thanks for the review though

finalgetsuga
finalgetsugaLv1

He doesn't have to swing his sword all day during his pov's ur literally the author you can make the plot go by faster or slower the fight with the snake had no reason to be that long I'd be fine if you did it once in a while but after around chap 60 or 70 Ezra appears for 3 chaps every 10-20 chapters it's annoying, I've read stories that do that but make it interesting but u drag it on legit the snake fight could've been 10 chaps but you made it 40 literally it made me so mad having to read it I quite literally didn't care about the side characters you kept on introducing'm not even a hater I literally was one of the first people to read this and I've recently decided to pick it up again it made me want to break my screen I'm on 132 and am praying you don't start that again

VOID_:I write POVs with relevance, the things the aid characters are doing are what's going to make the biggest impact. I'd have you seeing that than watching Ezra swing his sword all day. Most likely, you're not used to reading a story in this format-can't do anything about that.
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VOID_Author

Disagree again, I'll admit the mountain arc is a bit long. BUT! That's only because I was highlighting the actions of other parties. If nothing else, each chapter brought the plot forward-in a moderate pace. But unlike most, I don't just fast forward 10yrs and go 'He practised a lot, so now he has attained blah blah blah power and can do blah blah blah amazing things' No, I try as much as possible to show it! and not tell it, that's why it feels slow to you-others skip over such things More importantly, for me, the MC is just another human in a world full of them-I can decide to focus on him and I can decide not to. And I will never overlook the work of side characters, especially since it is so pivotal to everything that happens afterward. Seriously, you wouldn't be so frustrated if you didn't think of side characters as Cannon fodder for plot. Guess what, in my novel-their not! Without Fredrick and Cabrera, Ezra would handicapped in doing many things. You should think of it as resourceful most regression MC's don't have. It's always solo this, solo that-when in truth, being conceived is the work of TWO people-not one! Here, I highlight the resourceful of capable teammates. Stop thinking you're reading any other reincarnation novel. Read this as if you've never read one, and the reading experience would be instantly be enjoyable. But if you can't comport with the difference between this and the Norm, I don't know what to say. Last but not least, thank you 💕😊 for taking time to write your opinion. Even though I talk like this it's highly valued, and I'll remember to keep a balance between POV changes. I can tell you this though, the POV soon shifts to Ezra exclusively[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

finalgetsuga:He doesn't have to swing his sword all day during his pov's ur literally the author you can make the plot go by faster or slower the fight with the snake had no reason to be that long I'd be fine if you did it once in a while but after around chap 60 or 70 Ezra appears for 3 chaps every 10-20 chapters it's annoying, I've read stories that do that but make it interesting but u drag it on legit the snake fight could've been 10 chaps but you made it 40 literally it made me so mad having to read it I quite literally didn't care about the side characters you kept on introducing'm not even a hater I literally was one of the first people to read this and I've recently decided to pick it up again it made me want to break my screen I'm on 132 and am praying you don't start that again
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