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2023-03-19 00:03

Great sequel you're doing here, I noticed a improvement of your writing from the other one. The characters as like the other are really enjoyable. The only point here to improve is the writing (grammar) and it would be good to improve the World Background. I now that's a fanfic based in another world, however for a first reader it would be great to have some context. All in all, keep the good work :)

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