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3PoundsOfRice
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2022-06-01 11:19

A word of advice, that martial soul "spirit soul" in your previous version, does not seem logical to me. All martial souls are an extension of the soul. I recommend a neural type martial soul. There is already a character with a martial soul brain, but it only has a silver rating. I recommend a martial soul that encompasses the entire nervous system. Unless you're going to create an ultimate martial soul that powers every last molecule of his body. But I think it's better to have two powerful martial armalas, since you can absorb more rings. Then you can make each one evolve or even give them a spiritual fusion.

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Gherman_Sparrow13
Gherman_Sparrow13Author

Looks like I'll still be using Spirit in the previous novel, but I'll explain how he'll get it. Anyway, thanks for the advice.

Lord_Hastur
Lord_HasturLv4

is this a harem?

Gherman_Sparrow13:Looks like I'll still be using Spirit in the previous novel, but I'll explain how he'll get it. Anyway, thanks for the advice.
Gherman_Sparrow13
Gherman_Sparrow13Author

I like Harems, but I don't really like Harems too much. Well, I've only just thought of one Heroine, and even then I'm having a little trouble how this character will appear.

Lord_Hastur:is this a harem?
Lord_Hastur
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Broo please don't make it harem there are already too much harem novels in webnovel just one heroine is fine you know

Gherman_Sparrow13:I like Harems, but I don't really like Harems too much. Well, I've only just thought of one Heroine, and even then I'm having a little trouble how this character will appear.
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