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Vrinda13
Vrinda13Lv52yr
2022-06-16 19:14

First of all I wish author good luck for her first book. I can see that this book has a lot of potential. Everything is written with much detail. She has a grip of her story. She knows what she is writing. My only advice to author is that she must proofread the first few chapters for any small error like paragraph length or ignorable grammar mistakes because they dampen the mood of readers, and I don’t want this hidden gem to get lost because of some silly correctable mistakes in the beginning. I can see the author is improving with each new chapter. So she must edit the first few chapters to make them at par.

LOVE OR DEAL?

_eellaabbee
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22 Chs

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_eellaabbee
_eellaabbeeAuthor

From the bottom of my heart, thank you. I shall make every effort to follow your wise advice. <333

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Vrinda13
Vrinda13Lv5

You are welcome!! This novel is really very good.

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la0la0
la0la0Lv10

what a good book author i need to add it on my collection to keep me updated on your chaps there are few grammatical errors but for sure it will improve day by day on your writing journey goodluck author!💙

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Ash_khanal
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This story is Fantastic. I can't wait for the rest of the story. it is very addictive. I hope you keep up with the great work. I recommend it to all.

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trumpet_creeper01
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Awesome read. I thought the storyline was regular at the beginning, but it had a unique charm and different style to it. I really enjoyed your narrating style, simple and indulging. Keep up the good work.

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Surbhi_mithil
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Couldn't wait any longer so I went ahead to read till 9 chapters of it .All I can say is this was awesome read that' s pretty set apart from other novels .So I 'm giving it a thumbs up and all five star .Great work author 👌

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Elle_Tee
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I am a sucker for a fast-paced story so I'll suggest to the author make its pace a bit faster not because it's what I preferred but because I believe it could make the story better. The content is good, the characters are fine, and the writing is alright. Overall, it was fine and still has a lot of potential to offer.

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THEGUYFROMVILLAGE
THEGUYFROMVILLAGELv2

First of all, I wish the author good luck with her first book. I can see that this book has a lot of potentials. Everything is written in much detail. She has a grip on her story. She knows what she is writing. This is a must-read book for romance lovers.

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Your storyline is great. I love your narrating style. your story is really addictive no doubt, I am curious about what is the next.... waiting for the next..

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Juliet_Omuadona
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Thrilling! I have only read a few chapters, but the way the author narrates the story kept me reading. I am already curious about so many events. This is a must-read if you are looking for a romantic novel to entertain yourself.

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love the way this story is going and the plot and character development is great I'm definitely adding this book to my library, keep up the good work author❤️

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