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WorthyAdversary
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2022-06-19 08:41

Uhm, what can I say. I was really, and I mean really disappointed in the grammar. You honestly need to learn things like there needs to be a period after marital statuses like all the "Mrs" need to be written "Mrs." There were also some points where you don't put both quotations in and a lot of other grammar mistakes. The writing style is also really robotic. Stability of updates is fine, no qualms there, just, if you want to get more readers, then update every day or every other day. Story development is also fine, it's going pretty well. Character design is okay... The interactions between them are, again, really robotic, so I had to give it a 3. World background is the best part. I really like the unique idea of the world, and want to see how deep and intricate it goes. Overall, a good novel for an aspiring author.

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Thank you for the review. I'll try to meet up to your taste hopefully.

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