The story is really cool to follow, even if sometimes the mc's arrogance is a bit boring, it's ok. I'm not going to criticize the grammar, I don't feel good enough for that ^^'. The only downside that I find is that there are some inconsistencies and passages that are not too logical that would require a little proofreading like just for example the name of the mc which changes from one paragraph to another. *The sequel contains SPOILERS* During the fight against Kyle he reveals his true identity quietly just to show himself. Can't he just sneak attack instead of wasting time? If Kyle runs away instead of fighting, can't he tell the world who he is? Otherwise there's a moment when he beats the vampire Kyle but I don't know why he doesn't kill him straight away when he's in front of everyone, okay the other one doesn't want to kill him but why he takes the risk of speaking without real logic if you wanted to speak, do it during the fight when you were playing hide and seek with the shadows. At any time Kyle shouts to everyone his true identity. You describe a very intelligent evil mc but he is sometimes so stupid all of a sudden for no valid reason, it's a shame. Also the part where he understands that he will have to kill Lucy doesn't tell me that he really forgot Klien... It's just you who forgot him. Last passage and after I stop but at the beginning of the novel we are told that vampires do not have a soul that the mc can recover (I may have misunderstood but it seemed clear to me) and yet after that there is no There's no more problem with a single vampire. There have been other passages like that which are a little illogical and which stand out from the rest for no valid reason. *End of spoilers* Otherwise, overall it's a good read. Eager to read what follows !
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LIKEAfter the return of 5 years, the story sucks and the number of errors is endless, I don't know what has changed but it doesn't look like it was written by the same author... Endless repetitions of sentences and situations, coincidences that make the story much too forced, the characters all lose their credibility and the scale of power is totally broken, once super strong, once super weak, despite certain justification this is not enough most of the time. I have the impression that you have trouble dealing with power differences. I'm sorry to say this, but you should start from there. It's the end of a trip for me. It's a shame, it was well before the 5-year leap, well, it was already going off the rails, but it was still ok.
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