Grammar is great, the fights as well but somehow, the story is boring, don't get me wrong it's one of the best multi MC stories out here but that's it, other than that, it's just bland
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I guess it’s about what one finds interesting. Any ideas on what i should do tho?
One thing I've noticed is some of their actions are motivated by their past lives yet there's zero info on that and so the reader ends up being lost and unaware of what goal your two MCs have, it just seems like they are massacring people just for the heck of it, which is not really an engaging premise, moreover, the interactions they have with the higher ups, teachers and family members are too hollow, it's as if they are speaking to cardboard boxes that can only react and play to their tune, only character that feel real is Pakura and Hikari and that's after stretching it a little, also your main characters need more depth than let's kill, scheme, get stronger, which again you seem to have based on their past lives but the more you drag on their real motivations and thinking the more discouraged the readers become .
Pastlives:I guess it’s about what one finds interesting. Any ideas on what i should do tho?
I see. I’ll work on the cardboard boxes. As for their motivation and past life, ch 32 is a flashback so you’ll get an idea of what they were like in their past life, comparing them to what they are now.
Ouranos_Gein:One thing I've noticed is some of their actions are motivated by their past lives yet there's zero info on that and so the reader ends up being lost and unaware of what goal your two MCs have, it just seems like they are massacring people just for the heck of it, which is not really an engaging premise, moreover, the interactions they have with the higher ups, teachers and family members are too hollow, it's as if they are speaking to cardboard boxes that can only react and play to their tune, only character that feel real is Pakura and Hikari and that's after stretching it a little, also your main characters need more depth than let's kill, scheme, get stronger, which again you seem to have based on their past lives but the more you drag on their real motivations and thinking the more discouraged the readers become .
