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IamMountTai
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2022-08-23 23:26

CRITICAL REVIEW Read up to current latest release 71/71 It's not bad. Very lightnovelish and anime-like written story. I don't really have much to comment about it surprisingly. There's some persona inspiration which is awesome. As for the romance, I can't tell if the mc is being oblivious or is dense. I assume the former. A complaint would be that while I did like it, the heroines seem easy to fall in love with the mc. Ngl it really seems to be resembling a tras*y isekai webnovel. Then again it can technically be excused since it is a dating sim world... but I value realism so it bugs me. As the story progesses the mc also appears to be falling into the shoes of becoming a true generic mc. Please try and avoid that. This is a frequent occurring issue in most 'mob stories', which defeats the purpose of the mob genre. It's hard, so just try and make it so he doesn't seem generic. Another issue I've had is that the novel does seem to kinda rush things somewhat. It kinda gives off the impression of skipping/wandering around with no truly meaningful substantial progress. An example would be when the story introduces Elicia. (Spoiler) Okay so then have an event together and then everything is just glossed over. They are friends I guess? We barely see any interactions which is different from someone like Luna who we see a lot of and see clear development of and most importantly... REASON TO CARE- that's how I express it. It's much like Isabel and Elizabeth where everything feels glossed and not substantial. They don't give me reason to care enough. And its not enough to tell, but you must show it. Luna feels "show" while others feel like "tell". Some spoilers~ Grigory is awesome but his prestige falls the further you are in the novel. Perhaps its because of my expectations for him of being like a double-edged sword. The seemingly ominpotent power he brings in exchange for something precious later along the line. Because right now, he's basically a full-on slave for the mc. I had hopes of him being a very nightmare-like being for the mc that hes forced to use. But with the tone of the story and all, Grigory is just likable and comical. Much like my other reviews, I always end by trying to ship. As not all heroines are introduced (I think), I suppose I ship the MC with Elicia since I'm a fan of tragic heroines. Even tho we barely know her. I hope this doesn't end in a harem ending!

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Adam_Clinton
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What's the difference between being oblivious and dense?

IamMountTai
IamMountTaiLv13

Pretty similar but oblivious means being unaware of their surroundings. As for referring to someone as dense it means stupid and usually related to love when it comes to anime.

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sigh....I have been waiting an eternity for the author to continue this great story. so listen to my ranting Title: A Heartfelt Tribute to a Talented Author It is with a bittersweet mix of emotions that I write this heartfelt review for an author who, regrettably, chose to discontinue their remarkable book. With every page, this author effortlessly transported readers into a captivating world filled with vivid characters and gripping narratives. Their talent for storytelling was nothing short of extraordinary, leaving readers hungry for more with each passing chapter. The author's prose danced across the pages, weaving a tapestry of emotions that resonated deeply with readers. The characters they created were multidimensional, flawlessly capturing the essence of the human experience. From moments of heart-wrenching vulnerability to exhilarating triumphs, the author had an unparalleled ability to make us laugh, cry, and reflect on our own lives. As the story unfolded, the author skillfully wove intricate plotlines that kept us on the edge of our seats, yearning for resolution. The twists and turns were unexpected yet satisfying, revealing a masterful command of storytelling and a keen understanding of pacing. It is a profound loss for readers and literary enthusiasts alike that this author made the difficult decision to halt their book's progress. The world they created was a sanctuary, a place to escape to and find solace during challenging times. Their absence will be deeply felt, as the characters and their stories have become a cherished part of our literary landscape. However, despite the disappointment of an unfinished tale, I remain grateful for the chapters we were able to experience. This author's words have left an indelible mark on our hearts, reminding us of the power of literature to transport, inspire, and transform. To the author, though you may have chosen a different path, your talent and imagination have left an indelible imprint on the literary world. Your book will forever hold a special place in the hearts of those who had the privilege of embarking on that journey with you. As readers, we will eagerly await the day when your pen finds its ink once again, and your words grace the pages of another captivating tale. Until then, we offer our sincerest gratitude for the extraordinary gift of your storytelling and the emotions you evoked through your artistry. May your future endeavors be filled with success and fulfillment, and may the world once again be captivated by your boundless imagination and literary prowess. With the deepest appreciation, [Nameless]

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