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honestly the good thing about the story is the concept of a pain in mha, it could have been a good story if the chapters were more developed, they seem more like sketches of ideas written quickly, although you can always use this to make a rewrite in the future, It's just my personal recommendation, I give you 3.8 stars because I know how difficult it is to write, well good luck

just want to know are you gonna leave this novel middle or something in future. 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

the concept is nice like any other type of "reincarnated in (....) as (....) FF" but please where the fudge pain has all thoose kekkei genkai, where the fugde did he learn 8 gate, please be realistic open pain fandom to see his chakra nature and then you can start from there build your own jutsu. and the stories so far is pretty meh, just the skeleton of the narration no detail no explanation

Weakly, the main character hides his powers, why? If Payne is even physically stronger than the same Almighty, and if you use Rinnegan's abilities, he will absolutely become the strongest and invincible.

honestly I'm disappointed the way the character pain just folded like that despite his ability

Pretty good um the chapters are too short tho 🧠🎃😂😂🎃🧠🎃🎃🎃🧠🧠🧠🎃🎃🎃🧠🧠🎃🧠🧠🧠🎃🧠🧠🧠🎃🧠🧠🎃🎃🎃🎃🧠🎃🎃🧠🧠🎃🧠🧠🧠🧠🎃🧠🧠🎃🧠🧠

Great start and has potential. I hope he stays anti-hero and have a mini harem. Android 18 in harem pls. Keep up the good work and update more pls!

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