Item: Manaless Mage
Rating: 3.6
Author: elano77

elano77Lv122yr

2022-07-22 23:31

Could be better. Author is a clear novice though the work has incredible potential. What is the reason for making the MC so stupid? Why? Why try to build up the world and then give us a massive, unnecessary info dump through a flashback?

Manaless Mage

Gladstone_

4.4

314 Chs

Liked by 10 people

Replies2

Gladstone_Author

Yes, I admit i’m a novice at writing But there would surely be improvement in the later chapters As for the earlier chapters, I’m re-editing everything and cutting down all unnecessary info dumps Thanks for the review

2yr

StraxLv15

I myself didn't mind the flashback with the info dump. It definitely opens the possibility of a prequel... you certainly have the outline done for it. I'd read it!

4mth

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Gladstone_Author

This novel is about a boy called Harry who was born without the ability to draw mana in a world of magic He got a system and started his journey as a manaless mage It’s a really intersting novel Try out this novel,you won’t regret reading it Let’s keep rating ⚡️⚡️⚡️⚡️⚡️⚡️⚡️⚡️😎😎😎😎😎

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Night_Crawler619Lv15

1. I got a dig bick 2. You that read wrong 3. You read that wrong too 4. You checked 5. You smiled 7. You are wandering why you are still reading this 8. You saw that mistake, right? (On 7) 10. But did you see that I skipped 6? 10. You checked 11. And saw you that I doubled 10 and skipped 9 12. I said "saw you" not you saw 13. I also skipped 2 14. You got tricked 15. I'm just wasting your time, but if you were entertained, leave a like and happy reading!

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Thee_AngryBirdLv5

this looks like a novel I'll definitely follow.. from the few chapters I've already read I can tell it's gonna be a BANGER🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥

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ThefantastictouchLv4

I read till chapter 72, and i think i can't go further . When i started reading this , i had high hopes. The reasons were : - The pretty good writing( nothing revolutionary but definitly better than most books out there.) - The many possibilities of developement for the plot - The fact that the transition from a cowardly character to a confident one for the Mc was well done. - Although this novel takes some elements of another( bloodline system, which is not so great either) , it slowly finds its own way. - The other voice of the system which added a layer of mystery . But that was all. And some point, as time goes by, one find himself/ herself unable to continue because some problems are too obvious to be ignored : - The pace is horribly slow. It is not a bad thing per se . However when NOTHING substential happens to the Mc , it just makes the book boring. - What is even the Mc 's motivation? So far i don't see one. Him not having any clear ambition makes it so he doesn't go beyond the " i'm an author's good idea " to become a " i'm an author's good idea who works because I FEEL REAL " . Harry is an Mc because the author made him so. If he was a side character in some other book , People wouldn’t even care about him , because he is not interesting. This applies to other characters as well. So far , none of them seems a little bit interesting or real. - The story doesn't progress and it feels like there are no dangers or difficulties for the Mc(A competition is approaching but there's no tension at all ). The world building isn't doing much better , as it is nothing new and we don't even know that much about the world yet. - The author's writing is also a problem. Although the grammar and the vocabulary are good( it's nothing extraordinary but it's better than most of the novels on this app), the author has a serious issue with emotions. The tension, the fear , the sadeness... it's like the author has troubles showing emotions. It is not so evident in the earlier chapters. But as one goes further , it is more and more glaring. That's why every interactions feels so inconsistent and not relatable at all. Besides , i myself do not like it when the Mc dwells on sadness and regrets. But the author could have shown at least that Harry( even though he said the contrary) deep down, cares for his family. It should have been shown( or told ) a bit that it hurts him that they didn’t even searched for him when he moved out . What i mean is that the author could have add some complexity to the characters' emotions which would help making them appear real and human-like. Moreover, the chapters aren't that long . 72 chapters appears to be a lot but it isn't ( for that book). Overall, this novel isn't bad but just average . I'm so disappointed because so much more could have been done .

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Lee_Caldwell_5091Lv15

Another generic system novel. Moronic MC that hides his abilities and plot only moves to faceslap bullies. Writing quality is merely ok. With chapters locking in the 30s, it’s better to just move on.

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chapters are a bit too short and the main character is a little bit dumb. hopefully all that extra words and descriptions at the end can be removed so each chapter coin cost isn't inflated. high potential novel so it's worth sticking around to see improvement

2yr

EvadzLv14

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Deola_Lv1

I decided to try this novel and I was wowed I normally read FL novels and this is one of the few ML novels that managed to capture my focus and attention update regularly author, we need more chapters

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ZurblurisLv14

its nice to see another author from Nigeria here, keep up the good work

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