Review Detail of EANID in Dragon ball Z: A True Saiyan
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it's not bad but all the plot holes are making it so hard to enjoy the story !! it's also obvious that it's your first story and english is nit your first language. so considering all this it's not bad. keep it up author!!!!!
Dragon ball Z: A True Saiyan
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I swear I thought it was your 2nd language and I really thought that I actually thought that while reading it, But is English really your first languge?!
Ozonelayer:I know the writing wasn’t great, but was it that bad??
Kevin_Pollard:I swear I thought it was your 2nd language and I really thought that I actually thought that while reading it, But is English really your first languge?!
Kevin_Pollard:I swear I thought it was your 2nd language and I really thought that I actually thought that while reading it, But is English really your first languge?!
havent read your story to latest chapter yet so I'll save judge since since you seem like good people, but I feel with some research and editing, you could make this top tier. how much do you actually know about dbz. like you dont gotta know all the aliens you make them up since most dont have names and can always look it up.
Ozonelayer:I think the writing gets better in the second volume
one bit of advice is to change sentence structure so that they dont run on since webnovel has a weird writing format you need to go back and either shorten or separate sentences. for dialogue the scripts way works but the he said or she said just looks better. its all in the little things I'm not a writer but Ive read enough to notice a bit.
Ozonelayer:I think the writing gets better in the second volume
It’s been several years since I watched dragon ball z. Never watched dragon ball because at that time I had no idea it even exsisted, but I’ll try to fix the writing format. Thxs for the feedback 👍🏾😘🥰
Kevin_Pollard: havent read your story to latest chapter yet so I'll save judge since since you seem like good people, but I feel with some research and editing, you could make this top tier. how much do you actually know about dbz. like you dont gotta know all the aliens you make them up since most dont have names and can always look it up.
you dont need to go back and watch it. but watch some youtube videos or reading the wiki whatever you prefer to refresh cause your lack of knowledge shows.
Ozonelayer:It’s been several years since I watched dragon ball z. Never watched dragon ball because at that time I had no idea it even exsisted, but I’ll try to fix the writing format. Thxs for the feedback 👍🏾😘🥰
