Review Detail of PerpetualZephyr in The Average DC Experience (COMPLETED)
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Honestly this story started out ok and I was really enjoying it, then the author started trying too hard to be “anti meta” in the story. I honestly should have figured from the sypnosis, but the author goes out of his way to make sure that he can claim to be spechul for his “originality”. From things like the MC being AGAINST stat points for the first 30 or so chapters, to constant remarks that felt more like author notes mid story then actual dialogue. Things that come to mind are when he was about to go fight a demon he had to explain in his internal monologue that he all of a sudden wasn’t becoming a battle maniac. Another example was him actually explaining that him saying “take the world as my own” wasn’t literal. Little comments like these just made it seem like the author was breaking the fourth wall subtly to try and speak mid story and it felt disconnecting as hell. There’s also the fact that the MC is kinda….bland. Nothing really stands out and the recent shift from “fish out of water” to “let me taunt and take down and entire group of thugs/criminals” feels jarring as hell. I understand he’s been working towards that but it kinda felt like a whiplash because it seems to have sorta come out of left field. There’s also some weird personality change I seem to have missed? At one point he was threatening and actively trying to kill Harley and now all of a sudden the author is saying he won’t kill anyone? What? Its just sort of a jumbled mess all around. The writing quality (as in grammar and sentence structure, not plot) was great (for webnovel anyway) though. So kudos for making an actually readable story.
The Average DC Experience (COMPLETED)
Wicked132
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Calm the hell down. All of his points were valid criticisms and he wasn't even rude about it? Did you seriously think you would only ever hear positive shit when you started writing this story? That your work is so perfect and has no flaws and anyone who offers criticism on it is stupid and doesn't know what they are talking about? Your story is nowhere near perfect and you are C tier author AT BEST. Otherwise, you wouldn't be posting on this shitty site. In addition, you, under no circumstances, need to have the ability to do something to critique it. Look at literally any sports analyst or similar job. This response reeks of insecurity. The only one throwing a tantrum here is you, you pathetic wannabe. Lmao, the audacity to claim he could never produce stuff nearly as good as yours while spelling so much wrong in that response is laughable. Work on yourself bro, this sort of reaction is not normal.
Wicked132:I just love it when dumba*ses on the internet try their best to sound like they actually know what their talking about only to fail miserabley. My weiting is alwyas original, and I’d like to see you write something remotely as good as the stuff I do. You wouldn’t even know original is even if it hits you in the face. Your firstpoint is completly dumb. It’s called first person pov story telling, which is why I write in past tense. This is gray’s story and he’s the one telling. Your second point as even dumber. It’s called diffrwnt times, different circumstances. Gray felt compelled to kill harley to protect his identity, not so much with everyone else. Let’s just drop the act my dude. You’re probably one of them edge lords who just want blood for no apparent reason. You didn’t get what you want and my last author note triggered you, so here you are throwing a tantrum like a kid. Thanks for your effort in writing this essay of a review, which I already deleted by the way.
I just love it when dumba*ses on the internet try their best to sound like they actually know what their talking about only to fail miserabley. My weiting is alwyas original, and I’d like to see you write something remotely as good as the stuff I do. You wouldn’t even know original is even if it hits you in the face. Your firstpoint is completly dumb. It’s called first person pov story telling, which is why I write in past tense. This is gray’s story and he’s the one telling. Your second point as even dumber. It’s called diffrwnt times, different circumstances. Gray felt compelled to kill harley to protect his identity, not so much with everyone else. Let’s just drop the act my dude. You’re probably one of them edge lords who just want blood for no apparent reason. You didn’t get what you want and my last author note triggered you, so here you are throwing a tantrum like a kid. Thanks for your effort in writing this essay of a review, which I already deleted by the way.