Honestly speaking, there are two main problems; #1 Grammatical Errors and #2 Chapter Length. While I was reading it, I felt like I was reading the essay of a high school student. It was too short, and some words just doesn't fit. There are also typographical errors such as you spell his name as Piper instead of Pipe which is very crucial to the story. Just keep writing and you'll get the hang of it.
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LIKEThank you for your honest feedback. I fully understand that this story has ALOT of Grammatical errors that I nor my computer pick for some reason (My google doc is crap picking errors up for someone reason. As for the chapters that feel like essays I just uploaded another chapter with a different writing style is that the essay one or is it the first 3ish?
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