Review Detail of JoshLane in A BILLIONAIRE'S TRUST GAME

It honestly looks like a manuscript for a show/movie and there are some formatting error, especially with the punctuation marks, but it seems like it's getting better. However, getting past of all that, it really is a story with a lot of potential. It just needs proper formatting, in terms of the punctuation marks, and a proper pacing when introducing characters because I was immediately thrusted into the world without any prior knowledge of who the characters are as persons.