Review Detail of shruti_0108 in Lazing Off In The Clan, I Awakened The Immortality System

This story could have been little interesting if the character design , world background was better . There are many inconsistency in the plot one moment he is talking then suddenly next chapter he is doing something entirely different . story is not connected at all its like every chapter is not connected there are many time where chapter and plot is repeating . It is very tiring to read this . I sincerely hope that that the can be edited again and little changes are made so that it can become readable. I still have this in my library hope see the Improvement .