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2022-09-08 05:49

I'm sorry to say I gave up after 20 chapters because it was too much of a struggle trying to figure out what the author was trying to say. Vocabulary, grammar, spelling, typographical errors.. . . I hope you can get a good editor/translator/proofreader to clean up the manuscript. You have potential and I'd like to see you shine.

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thx for the recommendation and i have just recently downloaded profreeder and I'm currently editing my book.....so thx for the review, I appreciate it....if you still want to chat me up...my discord is 'sharon_rose18#0062.' thx and have a nice day ❤️

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