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Duku_GanRyu
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2023-01-17 17:58

The idea for the story is great. the characters seem to be thought out and the Worldbuilding is stable. But there are many grammar errors. the promise and what the fmc is trying to do is very very confusing. So much so that no matter what explaination is presented for her actions later on it will still be extremly confusing because vital information is being left out in conversations and the motivations are very unclear.

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i see... but may I ask what chapter you are in right now?... i just wish to know... thank you for reading and the review... ^_^

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Currently, at Chapter 50, 3/4 through the first volume. To the new readers, here is what to expect. This is a book that does a major degree in foreshadowing. Those who do not like it, be warned. At first, the foreshadowing is a bit meh, but later on you can see that the author is in their element, you will actually start thinking along with them and look forward to it. You will just have to wait the meh and uncertain part through, it is just the first 10 or so chapter, where it is uncertain, how the character's are coming to conclusions and where in the world they are, but the smoke starts settling down after 10 or so chapter. Then you get the Protagonist Heather, starting to see the world through a different and much more mature prespective. The book has an epic take on rebirth, and the consequences it has on a person and their psychology, it does not brush away the scars of the protagonist but shows how they are dealing with it. That is why on the scope of Character building it is OP. The story development thpugh slow is not boring. It is also slow, because it show an amzing characterstic of the protagonist, 'time bidding' her favourite hobby. Throughout, the slow pace, you get the clues to solve the greater mystery and see the final act coming together in bits and pieces. I will update more, after I have read further. But otherwise, the book is worth a read. Especially, for those who like a strong and sure FL, who is a toch dramatic and not altogether cold and dispassionate.

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