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CplDiel
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2022-12-17 14:27

First the Progression is all screwed up in this novel, it takes the players 2 hours from the beginning village to the first dungeon... no gamer would walk a realistic 2 hours to get to a dungeon. Just absurd travel distances. Then the progression is very off, from the very first chapters we find you can get to lvl 500, so why are goblins 20000 hp at lvl 20? it took 2-3 mins for each goblin for the mc which has far more damage numbers then an equivalent lvl player. so it would take 5+ min to finish off a basic goblin at lvl 20... dude a vast majority of gamers dont have that much time on their hands from your own words. So there is no way they would grind for 5 min per goblin. Even in a party you have to take into account the exp you would get, even if it would be faster to kill a single gob in a party youd barely get exp for your efforts. Besides those major points the characters are okay. updates pretty fast. The world is your generic wealth disparity society, so nothing really new or amazing. Grammer is good, sentence structure is good as well. Slow novel that is generic and needs improvement.

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Many of them right? But here's the difference. The maths in this novel makes sense and it is tracked throughout the novel. So many other novels have the protagonist receive items with amazing buffs but then they totally eclipse the Status Window from readers from that point onwards. That is because other authors (1) can't do the maths or (2) they just calculate it wrong. The other great thing about maths in this novel is that it is not shoved down my oesophagus like other novels to prove that the author can do maths. It's just there and whenever you check, it makes sense. - Quests - Big Pro of this novel is the depth and quality of the quests. This is attributed to Kieran being involved in higher level quests which demand more time, more meticulous preparation and it is logical as some of these quests can not be done alone. Some novels advertise world-level quests as being capable of being solo'd. Sounds great when reading but fails to emulate a realistic setting. This novel doesn't do that. Kieran is completing a ******-level quest (omitted for spoiler purposes) where the quest is going to hugely impact the game on a grand scale and the party requirement is not [1]. Why? Because what type of game lets one single player dictate the rise and fall of new arcs? Even now, I think a whole party completely such quests is too little but the ApexPen (author) has managed to convince me otherwise with the level of complexity and stages of each quests. - World Background - This another one of my favourites for this novel. And before I go on, when I say world-background I don't mean kingdom-building. They, to me are two separate things. The world inside Zenith Online is huge, astronomical but that's the good thing. There is so much mystery and NPC's have such incredible backgrounds you might even mistake them for characters. Even when players log off, you have assess to what the NPC's perceive about such a phenomenon from their perspective. Furthermore, there has been alluding to readers that the world we are in might not be all it seems and that there is more depth, more gravity to everything that happens. - Writing + Vocabulary + Grammar - This is probably ApexPen's biggest strength. The writing style, vocabulary and grammar are so well done, impeccable to be honest and it is vivid. I love love books where authors either have an amazing editor or the way they write is so seamless. It really helps a novel with its' flow and tempo. Nothing else to say but chef's kiss. - Butterfly effect - A short pro but an important one. Everything Kieran has an effect and he notices too which is so fascinating as it shows his awareness of his actions. **CONS** - Slow Kingdom Building - I find that this is a concern for a lot of readers, however, following the words of a famous saying, "You can't build a great building on a weak foundation. You must have a solid foundation if you're going to have a strong superstructure." However, in saying that I do agree that the kingdom building is slow. Albeit, understanding the reasons why, I do hope the author can intertwine bits and pieces and aspects of it into the novel soon to stimulate and help readers envision the big picture of what our world of Zenith Online will look like. - Lack of a standout villian/s - The main con with this is that currently, there is no real stand out villain. Perhaps that is due to the author wanting to create a strong background for Kieran before we meet our first villain. But, in hindsight, there is no young masters who idiotically run to their demise either. Enemies with thoughts? Wow shocking right xD? - Internal dilemma about item allocation to teammates - This is more of a personal one but I wish to see more of Kieran thinking about the items he gets. For example, (this example does not happen in the story so not spoilers!) 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Hope she can fight despite her class (no spoilers :P, you gotta read to know what class she is hehe) *Note to author*: if you ever read this, look man, you're truly doing a great job. Writing a book that satisfies everyone is hard, it really is. The novel is amazing so far and to be honest, any novel that doesn't lack common sense these days is already a great book in my opinion as it is a tell-tale sign of a great author. Don't burn yourself out and hope you understand that many people love this novel. Stay healthy and I always continue to look forward to reading more x. Thanks guys, hope you found it helpful <3

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