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CokeWhale
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2022-06-29 15:58

This story moves crazy slow. The lack of progress and constant POV switches to fairly unimportant characters is getting really tiring. Dialogue is also used or exposition at least half the time, and it makes everyone sound fake. Oh, and like so many of these types of stories, the MC knows literally everything for essentially no reason. This "super intelligent" MC got killed in a completely avoidable way and lucked into getting revived at the start. It's not a great character. Decently entertaining story, but not good writing.

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6_Void_King_9
6_Void_King_9Lv14

Couldn't have agreed more which I had seen your review before committing to 80 chapters. I posted my review which resounded similarly to yours.

6_Void_King_9
6_Void_King_9Lv14

wish*

6_Void_King_9:Couldn't have agreed more which I had seen your review before committing to 80 chapters. I posted my review which resounded similarly to yours.
CokeWhale
CokeWhaleLv1

Dialogue is also used >as< exposition*

DaoistopyAPY
DaoistopyAPYLv1

gracias por ahórrame el tiempo de leer esto

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