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CokeWhale
CokeWhaleLv12yr
2022-06-29 15:58

This story moves crazy slow. The lack of progress and constant POV switches to fairly unimportant characters is getting really tiring. Dialogue is also used or exposition at least half the time, and it makes everyone sound fake. Oh, and like so many of these types of stories, the MC knows literally everything for essentially no reason. This "super intelligent" MC got killed in a completely avoidable way and lucked into getting revived at the start. It's not a great character. Decently entertaining story, but not good writing.

The Witch Hunter System

Pointbreak
4.4
1067 Chs

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6_Void_King_9
6_Void_King_9Lv14

Couldn't have agreed more which I had seen your review before committing to 80 chapters. I posted my review which resounded similarly to yours.

2yr
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6_Void_King_9
6_Void_King_9Lv14

wish*

6_Void_King_9:Couldn't have agreed more which I had seen your review before committing to 80 chapters. I posted my review which resounded similarly to yours.
2yr
CokeWhale
CokeWhaleLv1

Dialogue is also used >as< exposition*

2yr
DaoistopyAPY
DaoistopyAPYLv1

gracias por ahórrame el tiempo de leer esto

1yr
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puremichigan
puremichiganLv15

Reveal spoiler

2yr

DaoistTamashii
DaoistTamashiiLv15

Great book with interesting story. The powerlevel of the MC follows an exponential curve, starting from zero and picks up massive speed - while still feeling "reasonable". The writing quality is good, updates are stable, the story is captivating, the characters are interesting and the background is presented to the reader through the story step by step naturally. Well done!

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NoWoRRyMaN
NoWoRRyMaNLv14

1. I got a dig bick 2. You that read wrong 3. You read that wrong too 4. You checked 5. You smiled 7. You are wandering why you are still reading this 8. You saw that mistake, right? (On 7) 10. But did you see that I skipped 6? 10. You checked 11. And saw you that I doubled 10 and skipped 9 12. I said "saw you" not you saw 13. I also skipped 2 14. You got tricked 15. I'm just wasting your time, but if you were entertained, leave a like and happy reading! 16. This is by no means, copied. It's original.

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Krypton71
Krypton71Lv12

A more “savoury” version of my review at 80 chapters: This is a peak-tier gem. Writing Quality: Pleasant- Very few grammar mistakes and a good level of dialogue-text. System text presented clearly. 5 stars Updating stability: 1ch/day- Great in my books. One of my only gripes with this novel though is the short chapters… some conversations spill into the next chapter which can break immersion. The release frequency balances that out so not detrimental. 4 stars Story development: There’s an established overarching goal and arc goal. It works towards meeting the arc goal with great storytelling and interesting developments and schemes in the background. Probably the best point about the novel. Lemons do not detract from the experience- in some scenes it’s described, whereas others are just post-coital conversations, something I’m grateful for! No dragging of lemons across several chapters + the novel isn’t all about seducing females to get to the top, though that is a part of the MC’s success. 5 stars Characters: The MC is perfect! Rational, practical, good at 😏, and most of all possessive. Definitely No NTR in this novel. Other characters have been portrayed well: Bodyguard recruits are as naive as recruits, City lords are as scheming as they should be, and potential harem members are buttered up well (developments are quick but not dissatisfyingly so). 5 stars World Background: An easy to understand power system which is definitely appreciated! Info is disseminated in dialogues naturally and through non-chunky paragraphs. Hope there’ll be some expansion on the blackthorn kingdom and demon fronts, maybe some political manoeuvring etc in the future. 4.5 stars The MC is an ambitious man who will scheme and subjugate [women] his way to the top. If you like this premise, then you’ll enjoy the novel for sure.

2yr
Pointbreak
PointbreakAuthor

Hello you, yes you, the lost and curious readers who have stumbled or been guided here. This is my third novel and entree to WSA2022, so I welcome and thank all for the support this novel can get. This isn’t an official review of my novel so just treat it as a Q&A area. I’ll do my best to answer all of your questions (without spoilers)🙏

2yr
MK_Infinity
MK_InfinityLv14

Hunting witches? Im in. ( ° 3 ° ) .

2yr
Soul_Grenade
Soul_GrenadeLv5

It’s a story about a misogynist in a misandrist world. BUt there’s hardly any difference in this world and any other generic plain medieval world on this platform. There are a lot of other minor things that bothered me enough to drop it without reading to full but I’ll mention the most glaring. The mc is supposed to be super smart but the author can’t write him smart. So they made others stupid. He will mention the most obvious common sense stuff and then say others were blown away by his intelligence. He’s basically the one eyed king in the land of blind. The world is misandrist but there’s hardly anything mentioned about it. (Except maybe male red light districts. If it even counts as one.) And the repeated (and frankly stupid in this kind of story based novel) trope about mc ”conquering” women to the point of belief reversal with his tool. Anyway I’ve avoided spoilers (I think). This was not for me. Though author’s grammar is fine(which is a prize here), the writing itself can be improved.

2yr
FunnyBuns
FunnyBunsLv15

Reveal spoiler

2yr
BigBroCa
BigBroCaLv14

Best ongoing novel on this site right now. I am at chapter 179 and cant wait for more. Storyline, MC, character development, cliff hangers - all top notch

2yr
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