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ZaHagagLv42yr
2023-01-27 23:06

Okay so the novel has a lot of potential. However, the mc is naive, weak and stupid as well as a pushover and when the host introduced his evil persona I thought the story would turn around but the it’s only temporary and after that it becomes really hard to read the chapters of the beta mc, I literally skimmed through the 90s cause the mc is over the level of idiocity. I see a little bit of character improvement but it’s too slow. I would suggest either merging the 2 or letting his evil self take over due to a trauma or something. Overall if it wasn’t for the free event on this novel I would have stopped reading after the beta mc returned from the trip to roselake town

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A few bits of information if you even want to proceed with reading this novel : (-) MC is slow to adapt and he is a “wimp”, meaning if you came here for an actual villain this isn’t the novel you want or if you came here for an intelligent and calculating MC also do not read this book (+) The premise of the story is interesting where you get this fantasy world with Gods, Adventurers (Players), Classic ranking systems like Silver, Gold, Platinum (*) The characters are decent, the novel is set in first person and thus heavily relies on dialogue and interactions for you to know more about them which unfortunately means World Background takes a few points off despite an interesting setting due to the fact that it is strictly first person with lack of early-novel exploration events (*) Writing quality is decent for a webnovel nothing much to say though the main issues are typos which isn’t that bad ====••===••===••===••===••===••==== Writing Quality : 3.5/5 nothing crazy but not horrible Updating Stability : 5/5 its still updating with a good amount of chapters to read [Slow-Paced] Story Development : 3/5 its ok, the MC does get around to doing things but its nothing much and at the moment hes still within the starter area Character Design : 3/5 not a personal fan of the MC but it does make for more “danger” when it comes to him going out World Background : 4/5 unexplored for the most part but has a lot of potential ================================ Tips for the author : - It helps to switch between the MC and the people he has interacted with in order to develop characters and the world more easily and it also lets us take a break from prolonged firstperson view which can be exhausting and boring to read - Fix typos - Lots of world potential and character potential so capitalize on it

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