Sci-fi genre stories are so rare on this platform I really have my hopes up. The set up was Excellent and the tech consistent. The beginning few missions and first part of the academy arc had me on the edge of my seat. Except for how his first kill response went for two chapters. However the kidnapping of his team from under him sabotaged the growing sense of power and leadership that was developing. His antagonist at the time told him he could never overcome those with authority and connections. His argument although obviously the bad guys was so convincing that it broke the flow of the story for me. Even MC's victory later seemed hollow and contrived.(no explanation of how the corruption was allowed or perpetrated on the campus or if there were any consequences for the opposing team.) Many authors will portray a main character with growth and then "nerf" them to slow the character development, I can only assume this happened. Unless we just wanted to get corruption of earthlings into his understanding. But then that will decrease his loyalty to humans and lead us to want him to betray humanity. I'm spinning into conjecture. Thank you for writing, and I look forward to seeing your next novel.
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