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Nyxus_
Nyxus_Lv142yr
2022-06-04 20:19

Good story premise, but not well executed. It feels disjointed and lacks a flow. World is not explained enough, and processes occur with out knowing why?

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BL00DY
BL00DYLv4

That's what i would call story building after all if you explain everything at begging what use of the story would be. For me flow is perfect as well as execution.

divinrth
divinrthLv13

you have low standards then

BL00DY:That's what i would call story building after all if you explain everything at begging what use of the story would be. For me flow is perfect as well as execution.
BL00DY
BL00DYLv4

Your life is low standard lol.

divinrth:you have low standards then
7ESSE
7ESSELv3

mtl is better than this

Oakley_Tallent
Oakley_TallentLv15

that gets explained later....I do hate that the mc doesn't spend more on knowledge....but.... he's not a genius or anything....just a guy trying to survive who has a bit of prior knowledge....I'm sure later on he will get smarter....and he does come up with some neat stuff if u ask me....and he puts together some of the mystery on his own which is cool... it really bothered me up until the author revealed more later on....but then everything made sense....so just keep reading and think of it like a mystery novel 馃槀馃し

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