I’m leaving a review after reading one chapter. The story is written well except for a few spelling and punctuation errors. When you read you can already see that the author has a plan for the world-building and the government. The update stability isn’t so great, last update was a year ago. I think my only biggest problem is when the character is dying he gets his heart ripped out, which is an instant death. There shouldn’t be any thinking or adrenaline after that because the heart is the engine of the body. Fix these things and I feel like it’d be a great read.
Vee_High
Liked it!
LIKEYeah it’s four minutes. I have doctors and nurses in my family, and within those four minutes, you aren’t consciously there.
Vee_High:i got the idea from here 🤧it said there was a few minutes grace which was all Edward needed.image