Review Detail of Boogada23456 in Aden Strong: Avatar In DC

Originally I was going to just give a comment but it turned into a rant so, I put it here ignore it if you want.The thing that probably bugs most people is the way you keep drawing out the story, sure it’s fine to tell us his inner turmoils but doing it as much as you have gets old fast. The thing about a fanfic that most people love is it’s fast pace in certain aspects, like training you can skip over most of that and give us the results. But you add so much that I just start skimming the chapters till something catches my attention. Another thing fanfics are known for is their fast pace love due to most of the audience hate for a slow romance that takes most of the novel to be realized. You don’t have to make it instant but don’t make the mistake of dragging it out like you have been doing with most of these chapters. With how much you have written you’d think a few years would have pass because at minimum it’s been a few weeks to a month at max 2 months. In the end you greatest mistake was not making this an original novel, and using the the dc universe as it’s background. Because in the end most of if not all the complaints you get is people want a fanfic with its fast pace and gets to the authors point. In other words showing the dissatisfaction the authors and readers have with an already existing work and making it what they think is better. What you are doing is writing an original novel with a dc universe background, the reason people are mad at you is that you are adding to the dissatisfaction with all the whining your mc does. Mister pity be I’m not from this world I’m the victim, mister instead of training I’m going to go on missions and steal drugs but all to get me stronger, not like I’m biting off more than I can chew. It’s not like I’ll cause any problems to the time line if I tell Batman and manhunter he’s a cartoon character and tell him the plots of several other universe making them slowly fall into madness with the information. You claim the mc was a normal guy but no one normal would risk their lives for half the things he has, and your excuses of oh I’m going for realism only works if you are dispelling the dissatisfaction of the readers at certain parts of the novel but you don’t. Now if you look at it through the eyes of an original novel this has great potential and a lot of people would be anxious for more, but as a fanfic the only things that are holding this novel together, is the hope of the mc becoming a truly bad@ss character. And the love interests which hopefully you don’t f@ck up by dragging it out because you mc is drama queen enough for this novel. Now even though I said all those negative things this is still a good novel so keep it up