Review Detail of KuramaTobi in I reincarnated in the world full of beasts with a Clash of clan system

It needs heavy editing. The story itself is a great Idea and can definitely go pretty far, but the overall grammar and writing is truly bad, sentence structure is all over the place; transitions and dialogue is confusing. The only thing I can say is try to fix it but from the way you’re writing I’m assuming english isn’t you’re native language so fixing it will be pretty hard. If you have a friends who’s great at both reading and writing english, have them help with proofreading and editing.